Lost
A log lost in the wilderness of the seas…
A rat lost in the mighty jungles…
A grain of rice lost in the sack…
Am lost too…among people, among the furniture and at home…
Will I get someone I think?
Someone like me; I think?
Will it all click I wonder?
What’s the point whatever I think I’m lost…
A single leaf on that huge tree…
A single grain of sugar in the bowl…
A single tealeaf in my cup…
Am single too…among friends, among couples, amidst family
People say wait…you will find the guy
Friends say hang on he’s around the corner,
Colleagues keep peeping out for me…
I feel he’s lost too…like me…lost
It’s going to be a while before I make my way back…
It’s going to be a while before I find him…
Its going to be a while before I stop cribbing and complaining…
It’s going to be a while before I say I’m lost…not anymore
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I'm lost ... for words!!! Nice poem; aptly summed up the feelings of many people in this world.
Good 'n quality Dress - Takes time to get stiched
Good 'n quality house - Takes time to get built
Good 'n quality food - Takes time to get cooked
Good 'n Quality Companion - Wud definitly take time to get sighted
Good Luck :)
nice...seriously !
I am not that much fan of poems myself, I can't go beyond writing nursery rhymes. But I can say this, I really like this one. I can't find the deeper meaning inside it though, I am lost...really :)...very good poem...got me thinking...but I am lost...please do let me know if there is a deeper meaning in it...I am in UKG or LKG when it comes to meanings of poems...
hey,nice poem...you'll be found again, don't worry...me first time here, but I'll be back...
Hey the monk, navin, vk and rim..
thanks for all the encouraging words...am flad am not lost anymore..
will post a few more soon...and i love all ur blogs...its such a read...
archana, I hope you don't mind. I'm going to try to do a "proper review", which hopefully will expalin my delay in replying to this peom:
Stanza one ~ Nice analogies, and original ones. I do not think that I've seen them before. In the fourth line, you speak of people, furniture and home, and I notice that the last words of the earlier lines are seas, jungles and sack... coincidence? If not, it's a nice way to tie up the stanza.
Stanza two ~ This is a mode switch from huge imagery (the scale of the sea/jungle/rice in sack) to introsecive.. you've pulled yourself into your shell while being rocked by the waves of ... self-doubt?
Stanza three ~ Now the pattern merges, this is structured the same way as the first stanza, again that link between the ending words and the last line... Intriguing way of putitng a stanza together...
Stanza Four ~ again a move away from the abstract, this tiem to without instead of within. And the first use of 'feel' in the entire poem makes me think that at this point, the poet is beginning to revive from that lost feeling.
Stanza five ~ The final stanza breaks the mould, but here, the repetition of "It's going to be a while before" makes it almost like a chant, slightly lethargic, but ready to keep moving, stirring to life now.
Overall ~ Considering it's your second poem, I think it's brilliant tha you managed to not worry about rhyme... for instance, the urge to rhyme in the second line of the second stanza must have been very strong. You write with feeling, but more than emotion, I think your mins writes these poems, and I do not knwo if you planned out the structure as you wrote, the pattern emerged and you decided to stick with it. You use a few words very frequently - lost think I.... if I were doing a Jungian analysis, I'd say that the bottomline is that you think you're lost.
But then that's obvious.
Disclaimers : I know there are poets who hate to have thier poems taken apart this way. If that is the case with you, my sincerest apologies.
It is a very well written poem, and I hope you write many more.
Bingo. Sums up the feeling of several people on this planet, I'm sure.
If U R true Archana, I am Ur Niranjan, pl come & meet me, I am fond of U
Who is true Archana that we have to confirm from Railway Administration and from CBI department of India.
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